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Flash Fiction Link: The Promise

 

Jared convinced himself that he didn’t want to go. In his mind, his father wasn’t worth the time of day, let alone his presence at his funeral.

Excerpt from The Promise by Mark Tulin @ Friday Flash Fiction.

Freelance writer, poet, yogi and photographer from Santa Barbara, California. I write and take pictures about a variety of topics, from my early childhood in Philadelphia, to my years as a family therapist, and finally to my soul-searching years in California. The things that move me may have a humorous or serious content or both. Either way, I hope my poetry, pictures and stories resonate with you.

8 comments on “Flash Fiction Link: The Promise

  1. Emotion in motion……harshness or pain?……..I suppose the writer and the reader answer might not be the same😎

    • I felt Jared was feeling love and hate at the same time. It was tormenting him.

      • It probably will and by experience I can tell you that when a parent you don’t get along passes away is more tormenting then loosing the one you deeply loved because your feelings are so mixed and messy and so are you totally messed up

      • yes, absolutely. it’s unresolved. in our hearts, we want to mend the difficult relationship.

      • Or even if we don’t want is the judging and the awkward feeling of not feeling what you are supposed to according with common sense.At my father funeral I felt like I was witnessing something as a third person ,from outside myself.It was strange and left me with pain and bitterness and confusion

      • I see what you mean, emotions in emotions. Powerful stuff.

  2. I really like this piece! The way you suck us into the situation in just one line, then I am so THERE with this guy, who is trying NOT to be his father in the ways that were no good- then the zinger in the end. Nicely done.

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