love the poem. Mark; read it a few times but the word ‘gnarly’ kept bothering me: it seemed out of place compared to the other words; to me it’s fairly contemporary, associated more with surf culture–
Thanks for bringing this up, John That word has three layers. Yes, one layer is the surfers, and I’m sure Bukowski had many beers with them. The second layer is the dictionary definition which is accurate here, and my initial intention. He was enmeshed with LA culture, and that’s what that word reflects, not only surfers but skateboarders. So for now, I’m sticking with it. Have a good night and thanks again for this dialogue. 🙂.
Yep, you’re channeling Bukowski, all right. 😀
Maybe I should have warned people. 🙂
No, I don’t think so. To get the full Bukowski experience, there should be no warning, no filter.
Thanks, Liz.
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love the poem. Mark; read it a few times but the word ‘gnarly’ kept bothering me: it seemed out of place compared to the other words; to me it’s fairly contemporary, associated more with surf culture–
Could be right, John. Although he lived in LA. I’ll think about it some more.
Thanks for bringing this up, John That word has three layers. Yes, one layer is the surfers, and I’m sure Bukowski had many beers with them. The second layer is the dictionary definition which is accurate here, and my initial intention. He was enmeshed with LA culture, and that’s what that word reflects, not only surfers but skateboarders. So for now, I’m sticking with it. Have a good night and thanks again for this dialogue. 🙂.
that’s good, Mark; you had the grace to hear me out and then interrogate your choice; I respect that: it’s a great poem 🙂
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